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Poem? | ...or verbal pollution
Aug 31, 2001, 10:58 AM,
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Poem? | ...or verbal pollution
I kinda like it. It has a lasting intrinsic 'tingly' quality which is good.
My only real problem with it is this line:
"And your reassuring rhetoric eases me into the conversation of the evening"
It just dosent really fit...
I'd suggest you replace it with something simpler but which still gets your point across.
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Poem? | ...or verbal pollution - by Girl Fly - Aug 30, 2001, 01:29 AM
Poem? | ...or verbal pollution - by WillowStyx - Aug 31, 2001, 10:58 AM
Poem? | ...or verbal pollution - by Girl Fly - Aug 31, 2001, 06:01 PM

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