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The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - apoc - Jun 02, 2001
[center]THE LAKE
She tenses, hovering at the brink of release,
While I gaze out at the waiting lake.
The tennis ball flies from my grasp,
Spins through the atmosphere like a green planet,
And falls onto the surface of the water.
Flying through the air,
The black dog passes over the fringe
Where the tranquil water meets the yielding muck.
She explodes into the liquid,
Jaws gaping, tongue flapping.
Forever reaching, she paws onward.
She reaches her treasure.
Grasping the bobbing object,
Locking it between her teeth.
She turns to return to shore.
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this was just a poem i wrote for english, it was written in the syle of Mary Oliver, an excellent poet. We have been reading from Twelve Moons. Its cool shit! even though sometimes you need to discuss the poems to really get them.
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - Glacialis - Jun 02, 2001
Neat. I really like that story telling-kind style
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - Adaryn - Jun 02, 2001
I like it. Its so vivid you can see the whole thing happening.......like slow motion.
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - JuggleFoe - Jun 03, 2001
hmm... sexual metaphors... am i the only one seeing them?
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - Glacialis - Jun 03, 2001
Hmh...? Oh... You little...
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - apoc - Jun 05, 2001
cool thanks, i got a B+/A- which is decent for this particular teacher....
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - apoc - Jun 05, 2001
yes jugglefoe you are the only one...
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - Amor Fati - Jun 06, 2001
No he's not. I see sexual metaphors and innuendos everywhere...And this is not a joke
The Lake | just a little poem i wrote in english, - JuggleFoe - Jun 06, 2001
yeah, the tennis ball/green planet landing in the water seems to symbolize sperm fertilzing an egg, to me.
heh... but maybe that's more of a reflection of where i'm at, rather than what actually lies between the lines...