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Thread Review for Poem? (newest post first) Girl Fly Posted on 10:01 am on Aug. 31, 2001 "simpler"? I don't do Anglo Saxon.   WillowStyx Posted on 2:58 am on Aug. 31, 2001 I kinda like it. It has a lasting intrinsic 'tingly' quality which is good. My only real problem with it is this line: "And your reassuring rhetoric eases me into the conversation of the evening" It just dosent really fit... I'd suggest you replace it with something simpler but which still gets your point across.   Girl Fly Posted on 5:29 pm on Aug. 29, 2001 You bring tingles to the spine I thought boneless And your reassuring rhetoric eases me into the conversation of the evening The dark cold evening Motherless yet more for being myself When I tap at your keys, you answer And when I knock the combination, you're there How wonderful, how perfect that you're there That you are.

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